Redraft of Episode 3

I got bored yesterday and decided that I should have another go at writing the third episode of Lines. Tara and Matt helped me with ideas on what could happen, although we are still missing the most brilliantly amazing finale we could possibly hope to achieve at the moment. Anyhow, here's the script.

Fade In

INT. – SCHOOL CORRIDOR – AFTERNOON

JAKE is creeping along the corridor, towards TEACHER 1’S office. He has a walky-talky in his hands, which he switches on.

Cut to
INT. – DETENTION ROOM – AFTERNOON

ZEKE is sitting with the other walky-talky. MEGAN and SETH are sitting either side of him.

ZEKE (deeply)
Jake, I am your father.

JAKE
So that’s the reason why I never met my father.

ZEKE (voiceover)
Well, you know. Was a bit busy. Had things to do. Girls to be with.

Cut away to TEACHER 1 sitting in his office, then back to the detention room. MEGAN tries to snatch the walky-talky away from ZEKE.

MEGAN
Let me say something.

ZEKE
Are you the one with the walky-talky?

MEGAN
No.

ZEKE
Shut up then.

Cut to
INT. - SCHOOL CORRIDOR – AFTERNOON

JAKE hears talking in the distance. He ducks next to a computer, just as TAYLOR and KATIE come into the corridor. Both in a heated discussion.

TAYLOR
I don’t know why you’re making such a big deal out of this.

KATIE
Maybe because you lied to me.

TAYLOR
There’s lies and then there’s lies. What would you rather me do?

KATIE
They’re both the same.

TAYLOR (sighing)
God. Get with it, woman.

JAKE comes out from behind the computer. KATIE screams. TEACHER 1 comes out from his office. He glares at JAKE.

TEACHER 1
You.

Cut to
INT. – DETENTION ROOM – AFTERNOON

JAKE, ZEKE, SETH, TAYLOR, MEGAN and KATIE are sitting quietly inside the room.

MEGAN
Do you know what I like about being in detention? We all get to learn people’s true colours. Taylor, for example, is a goody two shoes.

TAYLOR
That’s rich coming from you. Little miss perfect to daddy and a complete sausage to everyone else.

MEGAN (furiously)
You take that back right now!

SETH
I think we all need to take a deep breath and calm down.

JAKE
I’m with you on that one.

MEGAN (exhaling)
It’s still not helping me.


Fifteen Minutes Later

They are all sitting silently around the room. SETH gets to his feet.

SETH
I’ve had enough of this. I’m outta here.

SETH goes to open the door and realises that it is locked.

KATIE
It’s locked.

SETH
Yes, I know that.

SETH sits back down.

Five Minutes Later

SETH gets to his feet. He walks over to the door and tries to open again, forgetting that he has previously tried to open it.

JAKE
Why are you trying the door again? It’s obviously locked.

SETH
It might’ve been unlocked that time.

TAYLOR
Well it’s not.

SETH
Yes. I can see that. I do have eyes. (pointing to his eyes)These things in my head. God, It’s like being on Big Brother.

ZEKE
Look, try and use your intelligence, man, even if you are a politician.

They all stare at him.

ZEKE (continued)
Sorry, am a bit of a Doctor Who obsessive.